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I’m sending you this line to show
that my Revulsion has
crossed itself into Love.
And I’d like if yours did too so that
I don’t have to go back to despising
your existence within my own.

You drove your insults into the depths of a certain,
complex organ in my interior design
and it’s not quite as simple as that.

You pulled my hair to the point of seduction
and glared with the intensity of a ‘thousand burning suns’
after feeling the Thousand Island dressing I
poured down your shirt.

You took your little helicopter into the skies and broke
my heart’s Sound Barrier. The only blood line
in my anatomy that didn’t exist.

And, in the least of words,
you have driven me to passion
and it suits me to write this to show you
that I don’t want to asphyxiate you anymore.
©2008-2009 ~lakteed
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Infuriating Much?

Lmao.
My friend's relationships are so funny.

So, background story.
Last week, a friend of mine was pulling her hair out at the Chinese New Year party at my Chinese school because she hated this guy since she met him (1st grade, aw.) and now he's sending mixed signals and she likes him. And this was the note I wrote for her to give to him. It apparently went well, because they're now going out.
^_^

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i love puns; so "thousand burning suns" with "thousand island dressing" was without a doubt my favorite part. VERY surprising, VERY funny, and VERY poignant.
also, i'm of the school of thought that says that poems should express the unexpressable, which is to say that they should be about way more than one thing at once. you juggled the emotions extremely well in this piece, and made it very relatable as well; how many times i've been in "lovehate" with someone i can't tell you.
rock the fuck on, lady. loved it.

ps. way to matchmake.

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If I killed one man, I killed two.
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i liked the thousand/thousand part too and mostly because it was a real experience that she told me about before i wrote it and i was like, '0.0 OMG!'

i actually haven't been in lovehate before. well, maybe once in grade school but that lasted for what? two hours?

thank you XD

p.s. totally.

--
Here’s a bumper sticker I’d like to see: “We are the proud parents of a child who’s self-esteem is sufficient that he doesn’t need us promoting his minor scholastic achievements on the back of our car.”
-George Carlin
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so she gave it to him as if he wrote it? that doesn't bode well in my opinion.

anyway, it was nice. i still have to look up what asphyxiate means thou.

toodles!

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...that's what she said.
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nah, she told him i wrote it in her actual letter.
asphyxiate means to choke.
toodles? wtf?

--
Here’s a bumper sticker I’d like to see: “We are the proud parents of a child who’s self-esteem is sufficient that he doesn’t need us promoting his minor scholastic achievements on the back of our car.”
-George Carlin
:iconavinax3:
oh. that's okay then.
i know. i went onto dictionary.com after reading it.
toodles cuz i felt like i needed to say a 3rd thing and toodles is what popped into my mind first.

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...that's what she said.
:iconlakteed:
0.o;;

--
Here’s a bumper sticker I’d like to see: “We are the proud parents of a child who’s self-esteem is sufficient that he doesn’t need us promoting his minor scholastic achievements on the back of our car.”
-George Carlin

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